Aro-chan on DeviantArthttp://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-nd/3.0/https://www.deviantart.com/aro-chan/art/The-Casanova-And-The-Coquet-152778217Aro-chan

Deviation Actions

Aro-chan's avatar

The Casanova... And The Coquet

By
Published:
1.2K Views

Description

Branched out a bit with this one, but what I want to know is whether the tragic love story seems realistic and whether the title, the background, the formatting and the poem in general go together?

if this gets into :iconthewrittenrevolution: a very important bit of feedback I want is on this poems proffesionalism, pointers from every angle. Although I am an essentially emotional writer I tried draw a balance between the cynism and the tragedy and am wondering if I pulled it off or didn't. It was rather hard to pull this together without making it go on forever, however basic the theme.

Image size
1536x2048px 568.42 KB
Make
Minolta Co., Ltd.
Model
DiMAGE Xt
Shutter Speed
10/7500 second
Aperture
F/8.0
Focal Length
15 mm
ISO Speed
50
Date Taken
Mar 6, 2004, 5:00:19 AM
Comments40
Join the community to add your comment. Already a deviant? Log In
Brillisa's avatar
I loved this. However, I do have a problem with the background picture versus the poem.

The background is very bright and yellow, giving the reader a feeling of energy and happieness. While it does seem to match the first part of the poem - particularly where the man sets out to see, promising he will return - it seems to contrast with the rather depressing ending of the poem. Instead of this I would have the setting be a bit more to sunset and the boat sailing off into the darkness, however I know digging such a specific picture up is probably beynd you.

Again, however, this is very well written and I enjoyed it. :nod: